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Old 27-09-2007, 01:13 AM   #23 (permalink)
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Hi Mike

I think you've made a good start and commend you on your dedication. I'm still struggling to find the time to get photos of RAAF headstones for Spidge in my hometown!

I'm a bit of a stickler for writing (try hard, qualified, free lance journo) so thought I might tidy up the text for that entry you listed. Just offering my limited skills to the project. Hope that's okay.

Here's the first version:

Son of Charles and Ada Blundell; husband of Violet Bertha Blundell. George was killed in action at sea while aboard the ship MV Marmura, which was a Dutch Merchant oil tanker on convoy to the Houston via New York to Halifax. Two torpedoes hit the engine room and the ship was set alight and broke in two. She was sunk in position 29.00 N-76.20 W. which is 240 miles off the coast of Florida. Forty-nine crewmembers lost their lives that night. The U Boat that sank her was U502 which was sunk later that year, and was the first U Boat to be sunk by a Wellington. All hands were lost (52) in the Bay of Biscay.

And here's my "edit":

Son of Charles and Ada Blundell; husband of Violet Bertha Blundell. George was killed in action at sea while aboard the MV Marmura, a Dutch Merchant oil tanker on convoy to Houston via New York to Halifax. Two torpedoes hit the engine room and the ship was set alight before breaking in two. She was sunk in position 29.00 N-76.20 W, 240 miles off the coast of Florida. Forty-nine crewmembers lost their lives that night. The U-boat that sank her was U502 which became the first U-boat to be sunk by a Wellington bomber (July 1942). All hands were lost (52) in the Bay of Biscay.

Not much of a change but I hope it might help. Not sure about the "to Houston via New York to Halifax". "...from Halifax"?
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